Part I. Most (but not all!) of the following sentences have one or more errors that you should correct. Errors include unnecessary use of passive voice; lack of parallel construction; unnecessary or inappropriate words; punctuation errors; and other types of errors discussed in class. A sentence might contain multiple errors that you should correct. Be sure not to "fix" a sentence that has no problems. For each sentence, do the following: (i) Print the original sentence and hand-mark your corrections using standard copy-editor marks, such as given here, or in Figure 8.3 of Higham. (ii) Below this, print out your revised sentence. (iii) Then, briefly explain why you made your change (or didn't make a change). Thus, your answers will appear twice, once with hand markups, and once printed out neatly, plus an explanation for what you did.
(Assignment Sources: Online assignments provided by Ian Johnston of Malaspina University-College, Nanaimo, BC; the Virginia Tech English Department; and "Bugs in Writing" by Lyn Dupre.)
1. When the general meaning of this passage is considered, we see that it has an effect different from the rest of this chapter.
2. The surveying team arrived at the site at 10:00 a.m. First, a baseline was measured, and then random plots were designed, and finally, the standard sampling was done.
3. The imagery in this poem is used to create a sense of despair, and this sense is reinforced by the words which have been chosen by the author.
4. The conflict arises for three reasons: first, Brick's drinking, secondly, because Maggie is childless, and also that Gooper and Brick hate each other.
5. The decision to purchase the ferries was both financially irresponsible and it was an engineering fiasco.
6. Put the lamp on the table, the book in the shelf, and then take this tea cup to the sink in the kitchen.
7. Never waste extra letters by putting them upon pages where they are not needed.
8. My graphically-oriented interface is very pretty.
9. The mathematics is interesting.
10. I utilized profiling tools to make sure we fully utilized the computer's memory.
11. Please remain seated, with your seatbelt fastened, until the airplane has come to a full and complete stop; when you deplane from the airplane, be sure to take with you all your personal belongings.
12. The ball bounced off the pavement and through the window; it was cracked already.
13. One can easily contract a cold if one shakes hands with everyone within reach.
14. The writer sharpened his pencil.
15. In section 3 we will prove than all horses are grey.
Part II. For the following sentences, fill in the blank with the best choice of "a," "an," "the," or leave it empty. Briefly explain why you chose your answer.
1. I attend ___ Virginia Tech.
2. I visited ___ University of Virginia.
3. I went to ___ movie.
4. I saw ___ latest Star Wars movie.
5. ___ programs are hard to write.
Part III. Rewrite the following passage. You may (should!) make major changes in the text. However, you should preserve the information content. You answer should come in two forms. First, print out the original text in double-spaced mode, and mark up corrections by hand using copy-editor marks, such as given here, or in Figure 8.3 of Higham. You should then print out your revised version of the passage. (Text taken from an assignment provided by Ian Johnston of Malaspina University-College, Nanaimo, BC.)
Modernism a very common term in discussions of modern culture is difficult to define since so many definitions have been offered by many different people. The term is used by many writers to refer to new styles in painting music art poetry and prose in the last hundred and forty years or so from about 1850 to 1995 but what exactly is meant by the term. After searching through a number of cultural dictionaries, it is obvious that the question cannot be answered easily, any such answer will depend upon how the term has been defined by a particular writer in a particular discipline, Modernism to a historian of European literature for example may well mean in fact probably will mean something significantly different that what Modernism means to a historian of music for example. If we look at the history of English poetry it can be concluded that there is a fair amount of agreement that the Modernist movement in poetry began in England early in the century shortly before World War one when a new movement was started by a small group of poets in London. This new group which called its artistic style Imagism sought to reform the tradition of writing poetry in English, among its members was the young brash talented American Ezra Pound who quickly emerged as the leading public spokesperson for the group. A number of manifestos were published by Pound urging that certain new principles should be followed by all good poets. New rhythms free verse and a concentration on concise imagery were included in his recommendations for the new poetry.